Mr. Piddles! from stuffedark |
“Grammy!!!” Jonathon called from his room.
Grammy Ronni was babysitting Jonathon once again while her
son was traveling for work.
“Yes, dear?” Grammy Ronni stood up from the living room chair
and walked to Jonathon’s room.
“Can you tell Mr. Piddles a bedtime story? He had a
nightmare and can’t fall asleep.” Jonathon waved Mr. Piddles, a stuffed polar
bear, at Grammy Ronni. Mr. Piddles had been a gift from Jonathon’s father after
his last trip to Alaska.
“Of course, Jonathon, Mr. Piddles deserves a good night's rest.”
Grammy Ronni sat down on Jonathon’s bed, cleared her throat, and began to tell
her story.
“Once upon a time, there was a woman who lived in Alaska―”
“That’s where Mr. Piddles is from!” Jonathon never could
contain his excitement during story time.
“Yes, Jonathon, now be quiet or Mr. Piddles won’t be able to
hear the story,” Jonathon nodded his head and snuggled down into his bed.
“Now where was I... oh yes! A woman in Alaska was very lonely
and struggled to find food. The men of the village would go hunting, but there
was very little food to go around. One day the hunters brought back a large
amount of fish and behind them came a small polar bear cub. They told the woman
that the cub had followed them while they had been fishing and there was no
mother bear to be found!
“Well, I can take the cub,” the woman said, “but he will need
a name. Perhaps Mr. Piddles will do!”
Jonathon laughed and whispered to Mr. Piddles, “That’s you!”
Jonathon laughed and whispered to Mr. Piddles, “That’s you!”
“The hunters gave the cub to the woman and she led him to
her hut. She shared the few fish that she had with him and he curled up on her
bed when they went to sleep. After several weeks Mr. Piddles became very large.
All of the other villagers came to know the woman and her pet, Mr. Piddles. The
woman even talked to Mr. Piddles as though he was a human!
“Mr. Piddles, today we are going shopping, so we have to put
on your collar. Otherwise the villagers might think you are a stray polar bear.”
She had woven him a pretty collar out of rope so that he would not be attacked.
Mr. Piddles would nod and let out a small growl so that the
woman would know he understood her. They walked through the village every
morning and eventually the villagers grew to know Mr. Piddles and the woman.
However, one day a stranger came and couldn’t believe his eyes! A domesticated
polar bear had never been seen before in his village. He immediately ran home
and told everyone in his village about the strange bear and woman he had seen.
Soon word spread and one of the villagers wanted to kidnap Mr. Piddles, for he
had become quite the expert fisher!
So the man and one of his friends snuck back to Mr. Piddles’
village at night. They crept to the woman’s hut and placed a handmade leash on
Mr. Piddles. Mr. Piddles was very confused because he did not know these men.
He decided to go with them though, because he liked to go on adventures.
After
they left the village for a day, though, Mr. Piddles had had enough! The men had
fed him fish and treated him well, but he missed the woman who had raised him.
Speaking of which, the woman was very upset about the missing Mr. Piddles! She had
never gone a day without Mr. Piddles since she had adopted him.
After another day at the new village, Mr. Piddles began to roar
and pull against the leash. This broke very easily because after all Mr.
Piddles was a polar bear! He quickly ran back to the woman’s village and found
her hut. He popped up onto his hind legs and gave her a big hug! Mr. Piddles had
been very worried about the woman and was glad to be at home. The woman
returned the hug and the village decided to celebrate Mr. Piddles’ return with
a fish festival the next day. Mr. Piddles was very excited when he saw all the
fish the next day at the festival. The whole village celebrated and so it came
to be that every year on March 23rd they celebrated Mr. Piddles. The
end!”
Grammy Ronni turned to look at Jonathon and he had fallen
asleep- this time snuggled up with his new best friend Mr. Piddles.
Author’s Note:
This story was taken from the Eskimo story titled: The WomanWho Had a Bear as a Foster-Son collected by Knud Rasmussen. I really enjoyed reading the story, and thought
it would perfectly transform into a bedtime story for Jonathon. The tale was
about a woman who adopted a polar bear cub whose mother was killed by the
village’s hunters. This seemed a little too gruesome to include in a bedtime
story, as well as the ending in which the bear gets killed by another villages
hunters. To still include the other
village I thought I would make it a kidnapping for the bear’s fishing
expertise! Mr. Piddles is the name of my neighbors’ cat back in Mustang. I
would babysit him when my neighbors would travel, so I have become quite fond
of the little fellow. I thought it was about time that Jonathon had a stuffed
animal to snuggle up with in bed and this was the perfect time to do it! And if
dad is away traveling, he must be bringing back gifts for his son occasionally. It also reminds me a bit of Calvin and Hobbes so maybe there will be Jonathon and Mr. Piddles adventures!
Hey Kaitlin! I loved this story! I liked how you transformed it into a children’s bedtime story and I am so glad that you changed the ending so it wasn’t so gruesome! Mr. Piddles is such a cute name for a polar bear and I love how you tied it into the bear that Jonathan has. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteWow, this was a great story! First, I loved the title of your story. After reading the title, I thought the stuffed animal was actually going to come alive at some point in the story (great way to draw the readers in!) Second, I loved how you spaced out your paragraphs and used dialogue to carry the story along! This is the best way to keep readers engaged and understand the characters on a deeper level. I was thinking… what if Mr. Piddles actually did come alive in the end of the story? What if the grandma and Mr. Piddles knew this was a true story? Here are some funny and creative ideas you could add when revising it! Overall, I loved the story and thought it was very well written! I laughed thinking about my favorite stuffed animal and what their story might be! Keep up the great work.
ReplyDeleteKaitlin, I recently read one of your other stories about Jonathon and Mr. Piddles. I thought I would read this one so that I could get an idea of how Jonathon and Mr. Piddles met. Like I said before, I haven't read any of the eskimo stories but I might go back and read them for extra credit. From reading your re-tellings, I think that I would enjoy the original stories as well. You were right! This story fit perfectly as a children's bedtime story! Also, kudos on taking some of the more gruesome parts out. That was definitely a good idea! Your author's note also gave a good background on the original story and all pertinent information necessary for the reader. I also like that you've included "Mr. Piddles" as the bear's name after knowing a cat that has that name. I'm always making up names in stories and when I choose a name of someone I know I think it really brings the story to life, in my opinion. Overall, I really enjoyed reading your story! Good job and keep up the good work!
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